Preparing Essay 1

Essay 1 is definitely a work in progress. The changes I have made from the rough draft to the draft I have submitted was major. I started out with a basic outline highlighting my key points, it was very basic and general, and the majority I mulled over in my head over the past two weeks. I think there will probably be many changes I will need to make before the final draft is ready. What I may think sounds great or is putting forth my best, usually never is, and any work could always use a little (and even major) tweaking here and there. Sometimes I forget how I am addressing my audience, whether I am speaking to them first person, and then change my point of view midway which is wrong. Also as I read it, I added alot, or changed a view things after reading it several times. I think maybe my beginning is a little lengthy, but I was "trying to capture the audiences attention" though I am not sure I accomplished that task. We will see...